The job advertisement for my desired position is as follows:
| Position | Biologist/ Chemist/ Microbiologist | |
| Organisation | ||
| Date Posted | Wednesday, January 26, 2011 | |
| Application Deadline | Friday, February 25, 2011 | |
| Location | 40 Scotts Road, #22-01 Environment Building, Singapore 228231 | |
| No. of Vacancies |
| PUB is an organisation that is recognised internationally for good water management. PUB won the 2007 Stockholm Industry Water Award and was named Water Agency of the Year 2006 in the international Global Water Awards. In 2008, PUB was awarded the Singapore Quality Award for business excellence. NEWater, Singapore's high-quality reclaimed water, also clinched the 'Environmental Contribution of the Year' at the Global Water Awards 2008. Responsibilities
My application letter for the above position is as follows: 95 Whampoa Drive #12-240 9 February 2011 Ms Audrey CHUA Dear Ms Chua, I am writing to you in response to your advertisement for the position of Biologist/Chemist/Microbiologist found on www.careers.gov.sg. I believe that with my specialized skills and knowledge in Chemistry, I will make a useful addition to your team. I will be graduating with a degree in Chemistry from National University of Singapore. During my undergraduate studies, I developed a keen interest in analytical and inorganic chemistry. My specialized skills in analytical chemistry can be applied to water management and quality control. I will also be a useful member in your R&D projects in water quality research. PUB’s achievements and dedication in water management research has inspired me to pursue a career in your organization. I have strong communication and interpersonal skills demonstrated in my past job experiences at Ci You Childcare Centre and Goldenleaf Textile. I learnt to be meticulous and organised as I handled the company’s data when I worked as an administrative executive. I also honed strong analytical skills during my undergraduate training in Chemistry. I am a good team player as shown in my leadership and competitive experience in Netball. As a leader, I am motivating and encouraging towards my team members. I am disciplined and I uphold my responsibilities in a team. I am enthusiastic and friendly as I actively participated in events like the Inter-Faculty Games and Science Orientation Week. I am motivated and constantly striving for excellence. I was awarded the Ngee Ann Kongsi Scholarship in 2009. I believe in giving back to my community as I regularly volunteered at the Tai Pei Buddhist centre. I like stretching my abilities and interests from sports like netball, swimming and cycling to music. From reading about the R&D projects conducted by PUB, I am deeply inspired to work in leading laboratories like yours. I believe that with my technical knowledge, good interpersonal skills and passion in science I will make a suitable candidate for the position. I will appreciate an interview at your convenience. Thank you for your consideration. I can be contacted at 9XXXXXXXXX or email at tXXXXX@hotmail.com. Yours sincerely, |
Hey Pei Zi,
ReplyDeleteI like how you elaborate about your strengths point by point and that the strengths you mentioned in the cover letter are relevant to what the company is looking for. It is good that you highlight each strength with an example. Good job!
For me, I think your cover letter is good enough, but maybe you could cut down on the length because it looked a bit lengthy to me.
Hi Pei Zi,
ReplyDeleteI must agree with Cai Jie on his point regarding its length. Perhaps you could make your letter more concise by removing one or two sentences from each paragraph, or one whole paragpraph altogether.
Also, you might want to describe a bit more about how the skills that you have mentioned will be relevant and valuable to PUB.
Besides that, I think you have written a convincing letter which highlights your strong points very clearly. All the best for your application! =]
Hey Pei Zi,
ReplyDeleteDespite its length, I think you did well in structuring your application letter. I found it very easy to read and extract the information I need.
I also noticed the attempt to write it with a "You" attitude.
I would suggest editing/removing this paragraph.
"I am motivated and constantly striving for excellence. I was awarded the Ngee Ann Kongsi Scholarship in 2009. I believe in giving back to my community as I regularly volunteered at the Tai Pei Buddhist centre. I like stretching my abilities and interests from sports like netball, swimming and cycling to music."
I am sure they can get those information in your resume, unless you really want to highlight something about it in the application letter.
Perhaps that can reduce its length without affecting the quality of the letter.
Anyway great job! See you and the rest tomorrow for the meeting!
Hi Pei Zi,
ReplyDeleteI found this application letter well written for the following reasons:
1. You were sincere in your job application. I appreciate how you went to the trouble to get the contact details of the relevant Human Resource personnel.
2. You put strong emphasis on skills you possessed which would be useful to PUB. At the same time, you sufficiently expressed your passion about the job and PUB.
I agree that your letter is a little long though. To make it more concise, I suggest removing certain points e.g. your Ngee Ann Kongsi Scholarship. I personally am not aware of what this scholarship is all about; hence either elaborate on what receiving this scholarship means or leave it out.
Also, I agree with Ikhsan that your hobbies can be edited/removed. They add a personal touch but are not synchronous with the job adv's requirements. You'll need to weigh the importance of this against other information.
Finally, you mentioned how you were inspired by PUB's achievements in water management. I suggest incorporating this into the 2nd paragraph before last in a concise manner. This is so that your letter is a little more organised.
Hope my comments were useful (:
Hi everyone,
ReplyDeleteThank you for your feedback for my application letter. I have worked on what all of you have suggested and improved it for the final submission! Thank you very much for your help!
Regards,
Pei Zi